tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3747049133702978425.post8349445291439459759..comments2014-01-28T10:07:34.639+02:00Comments on Christian Writers of Southern Africa: TOTM October. The Upside-Down Tree EDIT #3Christian Writershttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17434690764853811247noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3747049133702978425.post-30443499330447447522013-10-14T13:22:47.691+02:002013-10-14T13:22:47.691+02:00Well done Fi! All the issues you refer to have bee...Well done Fi! All the issues you refer to have been addressed, although sometimes in a different way. Note also the use of IMPACT twice within the short paragraph.<br /><br />The published version went as follows: Early Christians were OFTEN referred to as those "who turned the world upside down" because they made such an IMPRESSION on people. I wonder if that could be said of us today.Shirley Corderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04429641202607657089noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3747049133702978425.post-2684610704392643722013-10-12T21:06:21.477+02:002013-10-12T21:06:21.477+02:00On second thoughts, 'in their day' shouldn...On second thoughts, 'in their day' shouldn't come out. It sets the period of the verb 'referred to'. It was people in their day who said they turned the world upside down, not people in our day.Fihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00909930010751462601noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3747049133702978425.post-34564463799341295492013-10-12T21:03:45.047+02:002013-10-12T21:03:45.047+02:00- Early Christians were referred in their day as.....- Early Christians were referred in their day as... Remove 'in their day' - 'early' has already set the period.<br />- insert 'to' after referred (referred to as...)<br />- Train of thought a bit disjointed in the last three sentences. I would take out 'Do people see us as different to them', and tack most of it on to the beginning of the last sentence - 'Do Fihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00909930010751462601noreply@blogger.com